Man convicted guilty of murder
A jury in Burmingham convicted a sadistic sex killer, who stabbed his on-off girlfriend and her sister to death, guilty of murder. It only took the jury three hours and twenty minutes to convict the suspect of murdering Yasmine and Sabrina Larbi-Cherif. Last September, the sisters were found at their blooded flat after relatives got worried because the girls had not been in touch. During a two week trial it came to light that the twenty-nine year old Ali used three knives to stab Yasmine twice and her sister thirty-five times. After that, the man was not done and had sex with the girls’ bodies.
Reaction
Where do people get the idea from that it is ok to just go ahead and kill somebody? I do not know where they get the idea from that they have the right to end somebody’s life. And if killing someone is not bad enough, the perpetrator even had sex with the bodies of the girls. I feel so sorry for the family. I would be so angry and overwhelmed with grief if something like this would happen to one of my sisters or one of my friends. I hope the men is going to be locked in prison for a long time so he can think about what he did and feels sick of remorse.
http://www.thesun.co.uk/sol/homepage/news/2443573/Beast-guilty-of-sisters-murder.html
Abonneren op:
Reacties posten (Atom)
You need to have a comma after 'killer' and 'death' in your opening sentence. The phrase "who stabbed his on-off girlfriend and her sister to death" is added information and you need to separate it from the main sentence. You should also write 20, 29 and 35 out in full (all numbers that can be written as two words or less, should be).
BeantwoordenVerwijderenDuring a two week trial came to light > during a two week trial it came to light...
Again though your summary and reaction are very clear and well phrased and you have used a lot of the vocabulary from the original piece without lifting whole chunks of text so well done.